The Selfish Dog TOTTO
Once upon a time there was a very selfish and envious dog.
The dog was called Totto. He fought every day against many other dogs of different races and sizes. Totto was very different from the other dogs, because, he always discussed, sometimes argued, and also stole food from other animals.
All dogs were extremely upset with him, and often they challenged him to fight, but Totto was too strong, fast and bigger, than any other dog had been able to win.
Totto was a very rude dog and did not respect the elderly dogs or ladies dogs. Totto also taunted their victims, insulting them and making them bullying.
Once, Totto had a fleshy bone in the mouth that had stolen minutes before, he was crossing a high bridge and totto suddenly peeked sticking his head out the side of the bridge, and immediately he stared on a bigger dog than him, with a much larger and fleshy bone than his.
Totto unthinkingly jump down the bridge to fight against that dog to have that glorious bone, not realizing long before, that the other dog was a reflection of himself in the water.
And this is the end of the story, because Totto drowned fighting over a bone filled with envy and egoism.
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Nicely done. The first paragraph was impeccable! There were some mistakes regarding the use of tenses. The story was very interesting. I loved the use of adjectives!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much teacher, I know I had some mistakes, but you know it is step by step.
ReplyDeleteI need to improve a lot.
God Bless you Teacher.